First Draft Teacher Feedback

Today now that we have finished our first attempt at creating the music video, we decided that i still needs improving, so to help us know which parts to improve on first we are asked our teacher for feedback on it. She watched our first draft and then told us what to improve and what she thought was good about it. With this feed back we will be able o make our music video look more professional and therefore more realistic for an up and coming artist such as what we are creating.
Below is the feedback we received: